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thanks. I'll keep that in mind.

I played cricket once. A very long time ago. When John hadn't been born and we still lived in Salisbury, in the duplex. The one time I held a cricket ...

This is really nice, full of raw emotion. My suggestions would be here: where it says "Our connection had become like an abstract painting, the meaning completing inaccessible to anyone ...

It's good. I like it, although there isn't much reason in it. Maybe change the bit about the cancer stick. You may be trying to get a point across but ...

that was..vivid.

I would use capitals at all times when nessesary. It makes it less confusing imo. Other than that, the imagery is quite rich and it's not difficult to understand so...I ...

thanks! :)

not to bad. good imagery. I can't find too much wrong with it, so good job :p

Not exactly new but haven't been in ages or posted much so just saying hi again. Things have sure changed here alot since I was last here.